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Patricia Meier's avatar

“Sometimes people will irritate you...”. I love people. I love humanity. I also have times where I feel like running home, locking the door and spending days with my plants, crystals and books... barring the door from any other human. lol. Is this normal? 🤣

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David's avatar

Very normal Patricia :)

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Weston Parker's avatar

David I have a question about this one. After "then consider if your life has been spent distracted" I can't tell if there should be a comma or the word "by" or "like". You have punctuation so I was looking for some punctuation to guide me. If you don't want this kind of feedback, let me know. Wes

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David's avatar

lovely feedback and always welcome sir

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Weston Parker's avatar

I am curious about the answer ....

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David's avatar

there is actually meant to be a line break before the final to lines, which gives pause and a turn of phrase in terms of poetry progression. almost but not quite like Volta, more a change in perspective and direction, and some phrase.

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Weston Parker's avatar

yeah, that helps me. Do you use the "poetry block" part of Substack? It helps me control the line spacing.

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David's avatar

I do sometimes but find the font is not to my taste, very good for structure though

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Daniel Appleton's avatar

Interesting. It seemed as if you were doing a haiku.

I'm trying to compose some " space age " koans, & it AIN'T easy.

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